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06 April 2011 @ 09:00 am
April Flowers Prompt #6: Green  
Title: Green
Author: mrstater
Rating & Warnings: G
Characters & Pairings: Betriz (Caz/Betriz)
Prompt: #6, "April all through the day, like a skein of cloth. Warmth upon the hands, the feet. The first day of spring is like the first principle. Life ought always to be like that. Perhaps it could be. He wondered if that was what life was like at all times for someone who'd been enlightened, a saint, someone with perfect equanimity. To be called out of yourself so entirely, it required the orchestration of every living thing. For half the world to have died in winter and be reborn at the saying of spring's name." (Samedi the Deafness)
Format & Word Count: drabble.5, 150 words
Summary: Betriz is more than just the joyful recipient of Cazaril's God-addled poetry.

He writes poetry to her nose.

Caz, who wouldn't love her, wouldn't kiss her except when he was dying, now lives to compose lyric ballads on her various bits of anatomy.

She laughs and smiles, displaying her not unreasonable hope that he who died and is born again is free of his demons and free to love.

What she doesn't say is that she is also a little wary of this new poetry-spouting Caz, who knows the Gods in a way she never will. That, while grateful for all the second chances he has, they have, she envies the Lady of Spring for being the one to make him into the man she always believed he was meant to be.

She tells no one, not even Iselle, that she fears the Daughter will be first Lady in Cazaril's heart.

For how can a mere mortal nose compete with a God?
bookish_brownie: Cazarilbookish_brownie on April 6th, 2011 05:18 pm (UTC)
Ooh, this is an interesting idea! I could see how Betriz might be a little jealous of the Daughter; She and Caz have an intimate relationship of sorts. It reminds me of Caz's thoughts when he is kissing Betriz after he wakes up from death: "The perfume of her mouth was nothing at all like a goddess's, but like a human woman's, and ver good withal." Although he did ask for her first. I don't know what says devotion more than thinking only of a beloved when one has a sword stuck through the abdomen.
What's Taters, Precious?mrstater on April 6th, 2011 08:28 pm (UTC)
I'm glad you think this is a plausible way for Betriz to think! At least until she's sure of Caz. Thanks for reading!
shimotsuki: chalion3shimotsuki on April 7th, 2011 02:28 am (UTC)
she envies the Lady of Spring for being the one to make him into the man she always believed he was meant to be

Oh, that hurts -- poor Betriz. And it is so perceptive -- no matter how much we readers know that Caz loves her, she must have had thoughts like these, especially since Caz has now had these experiences that she cannot understand or imagine.

Now that I'm thinking about it, I'm rather amazed that Caz came through it all as little changed as he did. Though I'm very glad, for Betriz's sake!
What's Taters, Precious?: Springmrstater on April 7th, 2011 04:20 am (UTC)
I'm so pleased you think this is a realistic depiction of what might be going on inside of Betriz. It struck me last night that we never really see Betriz falter or have any sort of reservations about Caz, even when he has some really weird stuff go down. Which is cool on the one hand because her unconditional love for him is beautiful. But come on, he's really weird about the Daughter; I think she'd at least have some inner concerns about that, even if she doesn't think about not being with him.

I'm rather amazed that Caz came through it all as little changed as he did. Though I'm very glad, for Betriz's sake!

I was sure for a while he was going to become an acolyte or some such and we'd get no romantic pay-off after all.
gilpin25: chalion_ibragilpin25 on April 7th, 2011 09:42 pm (UTC)
Oh, poor Betriz. I'm just going to mention the R-word here because Cazaril's 'courtship', albeit greatly hampered by the past and circumstances, must have caused as much inner turmoil to her as a certain other couple's must have done to Tonks, in a fandom not too far away. ;)

Back to the point! I really like this interpretation of the prompt: Betriz seemed always to have to share Caz in a way, and perhaps Dondo's physical invasion would be easier to come to terms with afterwards than a spiritual one from another woman? Though the last line is a rather wonderfully sad, self-deprecating one, and the humour in it is surely a very powerful reason why she would always come first with him.

You've really made me think with this one. Hence my review is longer than the drabble! LOL.
What's Taters, Precious?: Springmrstater on April 8th, 2011 12:42 am (UTC)
Oh, believe me, I've been thinking that if Betriz were a Metamorphmagus, she'd be stuck with mousy hair, too! Caz and Remus are brothers from an alternate dimension, I swear!

Thank you very much for your review that was longer than the drabble! I'm really pleased you liked this take on the prompt. I'd been wanting to do something to show another dimension of Betriz, and I hoped that was a realistic dimension. I just know that if it was me, I'd be a little uncomfortable with the man I loved being dazzled by a goddess, and feel a little intimidated by her! And I'm very pleased her humor came through in the last line, too; I hadn't realized it was so Caz-like of her till you pointed it out, LOL! You know what they say about couples getting more alike as they grow old!

katyhasclogs: Chalion blossomkatyhasclogs on April 25th, 2011 10:03 am (UTC)
This is brilliantly painful, particularly as it's such a plausible and realistic fear for Betriz to have.

I dare say that Caz doesn't consider it a competition, and would be surprised by her feelings, but having a God as the 'other woman' must be very intimidating for Betriz!
What's Taters, Precious?mrstater on April 25th, 2011 12:28 pm (UTC)
I was very much toying with the idea that Caz is oblivious to how his rambling about the Daughter makes Betriz feel, so I'm very pleased you felt that came across here as well as feels like a realistic way for Betriz to view it all. Thanks for reading and commenting. :)